Brucknerstraße 5a
31.1.2009
Mr. George Hemming
law office Hemming
13101 Washington Blvd.
Los Angeles, CA 90066
(310) 933 6270
Dear Mr. Hemming,
Application for the lawyer position
I am writing to apply for the lawyer position advertised in the Los Angeles Times. I read that you are looking for a qualified lawyer. I think I’m a eligible candidate
for this position. I have a good command of your language. Furthermore I’m good in dealing with people and I’m ready for all criminal cases. I made the general qualification for university entrance in Austria and after that I went to college in Boston. My affirmative premises for this position are :
I’m a alumnus of Harvard University. I’m well schooled in the area of criminal law and business law.
I’m always prepared to keep working hard and I’m a very truthful worker.
I worked for the Fish & Richardson and one year for Hart & Power in Dallas, USA.
I look forward to your reply and I can reached anytime via my cell phone, 77-765-7899.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
Magdalena Brändle
1 Kommentar:
Date: Don't write it like this!
eligible --> e.g. eligible for a grant / early retirement; the right candidate, I fit your job description perfectly, ...
I'm good at ...
"I'm ready for all criminal cases" C??? --> I have some experience with ...
"I made the general qualification for university entrance" C??? --> I graduated at the BORG Götzis (a kind of highschool) and afterwards attended a college and then got a Bachelor / Master degree at ...
"My affirmative premises for this position are" C??? - (No clue what you want to say here.)
I'm well trained /well-versed in the field of ...
I'm ... prepared to work hard
truthful?? = an honest worker ?
I can be reached / you can reach me ...
I get the impression you used the dictionary a lot here and picked the wrong words.
Problems with:
a/an
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